if you drive this way a little down,
you might pass through my little town-
let the gentle breeze guide your way,
while you drive through my town by the bay...
and while you walk by the cosy little homes,
on the pavement filled with dry autumn leaves,
you might think we are all happy,
contended in the life we've weaved.
every Sunday evening while you slowly drive by,
you might get fooled by the smiles of the children waving goodbye...
because we all try to show you that we smile,
while inside our hearts we do cry.
So,sing with me....
hep us,help us ,help us oh lord!please,
help us out of this pretty garden with its flowery breeze,
we wanna live in a place where we can cry and wheeze,
so help us out,we beg on our knees.
would you still love us if i say,
the happy mother walking cheerily today,
stares out of her perfect house into the dark night sky,
because,amidst all the smiles,her life seems a lie!
and that cute little baby playing in the dark,
is about to have his world town apart,
for his mum and dad are going their separate ways,
to decide who gets him,they have just ten days!
so pray for us,
help us, help us, help us...oh lord!
because this town is held together by such a frail chord,
and all we do is to pray,
that we have the courage to hold on for the rest of our days....
and so now,while you leave our town,
a little sad,munching our famous chocolate brown,
don't please get fooled by those cheery smiles wide,
for ours is a town that weeps inside.
Wednesday, October 3, 2007
my town
Posted by Dhrubo at 8:07 PM
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7 comments:
Plainly curious, what inspires you to write?
Must be a very strong motivation?
where should i answer?
anyway,since i dunno any better i'd better answer here...well,i write becuz i get bored otherwise.and i feel i've a job pending when i have something in my head buzzing,some idea and i don't put it on paper...
not very poetic,is it?
amazing!!
i don;t know how you got the whole description out, but this is really great...
"every Sunday evening while you slowly drive by,
you might get fooled by the smiles of the children waving goodbye...
because we all try to show you that we smile,
while inside our hearts we do cry."
I like the rhyme scheme and i like the entire topic. also the idea behind it...we're often under the impression that some people and some families have it easy, but i guess there is a small secret every family has...
lovely poem, excellent effort.
It is beyond poetry, it is the truth!
An inconvinient truth though . . .
yes you're right...it is inconvenient.but its good all the same.i mean,if we were happy all the time,we would never have been able to appreciate the joy.and quaint murmur,thank you for the compliment.i keep boring you people and you continue to tolerate...so the gratitude is for your perseverence.and i do think its great that,though we haven't really given up our age old trait of being hypocritical and pretentious,we atleast now talk about it!
What's interesting is that the poem if vivid - or at least I think so. It draws an image in my head or at least pulls in some memories of me driving pass this village where the kids did laugh and wave at us but it was short lived joy because they had to go back to their ordinary lives (which I would assume wasn't even close to good enough) in a few seconds.
hwta i liked about this poem
1. the total concept is very good
2. the language is not veyr ornamental but soothing to the ear
3. It defines a common thing which is again hidden from our view, whcih we often neglectt
i liek it a lot.. allova...
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